# 160, the Doctor Who tv movie

[jenniearcheo]

Right. Jumping around a bit here. I'd read where this tv movie made an uncomfortable claim about the Doctor being half human and had a read. Still haven't seen it, so I'm curious as to what the Master's "full Time Lord dress" looks like. But anyhow.

4th paragraph

"Doctor’s only now realising that you can never be to careful."

Add a second o to too.

5th paragraph

"The boys rejoice their victory"

Sounds a bit awkward. Could that be "rejoice in their victory"?

"stood up from the trash cans"
stand? (There's a bit of present-past tense shifting throughout this text. I'm attempting to make it consistent, as such temporal shifting can be a bit jarring .)

"The third one, Chang Lee, dives for the trashcans"
Break trashcans into two words.

6th paragraph
"Hold in there, old guy"
Now, I haven't seen this. So someone will have to check to see if it's "Hang in there" or "Hold on there". It's probably one or the other.

7th paragraph
"Bruce, a paramedic questions Chang Lee"
Add comma after paramedic.

10th paragraph
"decide to cal in a cardiologist."
Add second l to call.

11th paragraph
"ask a nurse to play a CD of Madam Butterfly to relax herself."
Add an s after ask. This is a little awkward and sounds like she's trying to relax the nurse with the CD suggestion. Could this change to "to relax her."?

14th paragraph
"those x-rays She"
Add full stop.

15th paragraph
"Grace tried to chase him but in vain." Change to "tries".

17th paragraph
"He says that he have a nice autopsy booked for the Doctor"
has? had? will have?

40th paragraph (which begins, "When Grace takes her things out of the hospital")

Last sentence: "possibly the inexperienced hospital staff."
Add d.

41st paragraph

"Bruce", really the Master add comma tells her he has a bad night"
He had? He has had?

46th paragraph
"causing Grace to jus stare at him in bafflement "
Add full stop, and a t at the end of just.

48th paragraph
"Grace says that good" Add 's to "that".

50th paragraph
"The Doctor is still kissing Grace but pulls’ away,"
Remove apostraphe.

52nd paragraph
"He wants the Doctor to look into the Eye or Harmony"
Change "or" to "of".

55th paragraph
"The Master and Chang Lee will be the ambulance that arrives."
This seems rather unlikely. I'm guessing they'll be in it or on it. ;D

61st paragraph
"Breath in, Grace!" Add e to breathe.

"He thought the Master was funny." Change tense to "thinks" and "is", or "was being."

62nd paragraph
"prompting Grace to remember she only have one life..."
Change have to has.

63rd paragraph
"Dr Bowman from London" Add period/full stop/wossname after "Dr".

"a guard has no intention of letting up to see the grand year 2000 atomic clock." Of letting them up?

"Dr. Wagg, creator of the clock arrives between them." Add comma after clock.

"As he told Wagg this, he lifted his pass from him."
Change tense to "tells" and "lifts".

64th paragraph
"he also tried his hand at poetry." Change to tries.

67th paragraph
"He asks her for the neutron ram but she hits him down with it."
Sounds a little strange. Perhaps "knocks him down" or "hits him with it, knocking him down" or something?

"Grace's eyes are black, the slime from her wrists, having infected her." Delete second comma.

68th paragraph
"The Doctor realises that Lee believes that the Master own both the TARDIS and the Doctor’s body originally, and were stolen." Change to "owned"? Also, this sounds a little awkward. Perhaps, "and that both were stolen."?

"Here the Master loses his cool in the debate and slips up, saying he has used up all his lives because of the Doctor (The Master was in his first incarnation when the Second Doctor trapped him a black hole and was on his twelfth when the Third Doctor met him, so it took him all but one regeneration to escape)" Change last to "escape.)." (Adding full stops for both the inner and outer sentences.)

69th paragraph
"The Master approaches Lee and kill the boy by breaking his neck and let him drop."
Change to "kills" and "lets".

[boies00]

Corrections done.

Thanks for taking the time to do this.

Dom

[jenniearcheo]

No problem, darlin. ;D

jenniearcheo said:

Still haven't seen it, so I'm curious as to what the Master's "full Time Lord dress" looks like.

Okay, like this I guess:
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Image:Eyeofharmony.jpg
(Gotta copy and paste, as the colon cuts off the link.)

[jenniearcheo]

Wow! Now that is one groovy outfit! I'd love to see this reproduced at a con. lol

en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Image:Prydonian.jpg

[The Thinker]

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So,

Eye of Harmony

and...

Prydonian

[jenniearcheo]

Ah, cheers. Isn't that the greatest, though? I mean, it's hardly what your average Gallifreyan would wear down the shops, I assume. Looks a bit fancy. Prydonian Chapter meetings look like fun. A little like Fred Flintstone's Water Buffalo lodge meetings.

[canadianlemming]

jenniearcheo said:

Ah, cheers. Isn't that the greatest, though? I mean, it's hardly what your average Gallifreyan would wear down the shops, I assume. Looks a bit fancy. Prydonian Chapter meetings look like fun. A little like Fred Flintstone's Water Buffalo lodge meetings.

There are "average Gallifreyans" in The Invasion of Time and Arc of Infinity (which -- if I recall correctly -- seem to imply that the "Time Lords" are the ruling classes of the planet), and their clothing isn't nearly as ornate. But for the most part, yeah -- ever since The Deadly Assassin, this is what the average Time Lord wears when they're at home.

Daleks = Fashion Police, discuss.

[jenniearcheo]

Heavens. Have you ever worn flowing robes and loose sleeves? Like on a daily basis? Major pain, lemme tell you. For hand-washing dishes? Forget it! And always catching them on doorknobs, too. Assuming . . . you have homes that use doorknobs, that is. And just imagine wearing those huge collars out on the street. No peripheral vision! None! Very dangerous in traffic. 'Sall I'm sayin'. Now just you picture yourself at Safeway, looking for the tins of Heinz beans with yon great collar on. You'd be all spinning around looking this way and that! ;D

[boies00]

Well, the discussion is no longer related to the content of the guide, so I have move it in the 8th Doctor section.

How about Eric Roberts' Master in his Timelord dresses?



Dom

[jenniearcheo]

Very cool. Very cool indeed. Collar's low enough not to be too in the way. Love the satin piping and the chain. Looks like the shoulders are shaped enough that it won't fall back off your shoulders and the chain choke you. I hate that. Also, you'd definitely be taking the outer robe off to help with the dishes. And watch your step. Looks like it's a bit long. Can't tell you what a pain it is to walk up stairs in a long robe. You're always hitching it up like Scarlett O'Hara going up the steps at Twelve Oaks. "Oh, fiddle dee dee. Another time distortion?"

[The Valeyard]

I didnt realize fashion was so important on Doctor Who! ;D

[The Thinker]

mrs381238 said:

I didnt realize fashion was so important on Doctor Who! ;D

It isn't, only to those who watch. ;D

[prydonian]

Almost every Doctor has had such a sense of style and of course his archenemy the Master does as well. I for one enjoyed seeing Eric Roberts as the Master clad in full Time Lord regalia. Thanks for the pic and for the topic.